after the sordid day
rain recalls the language of music
and I go, leaving frenzied voices behind
to bed beneath magnetic star spray
to see above the thousands
while I hear the lake moon moan
when can I live life
as ripe peach sky?
© Ali Grimshaw 2020
dVerse Quadrille - Poetical Magnetism
I have never liked crossword puzzles but I got a kick out of this magnetic poetry site. What a fun way to play with word use.
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This is such a tranquil poem, Ali. Like Magarisa, I also like the phrase ‘magnetic star spray’ It reminds me of beautiful rain falling down on a warm summer’s day, and also sitting underneath a captivating star lit sky. A lovely sky always lifts our moods and spirits, and that’s magic. Hope you are doing well over there 🙂
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Beautiful and heartfelt and so very rich. I love how you use your words so unctuously. Truly captivating.
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Shanyu,
How wonderful to wake up to this message from you. It is one of the best parts of technology that you can read my words and I can make yours. Thank you.
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It is my absolute pleasure dear friend. I truly am fortunate to read your words along with so many talented writers like yourself. Have a wonderful day.
Ps, happy Halloween 🎃
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Love the phrase “magnetic star spray”.
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Thanks for the feedback. The stars in the sky have always had a magnetic attraction for me.
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You’re welcome.
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rain recalls the language of music
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Thank you for your reflection back. I always appreciate hearing from you my friend.
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As ripe as a peach sky! Be still my heart… ❤
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A peach sky can be a big gift to your day.
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Beautiful, Ali! I love the sounds in your quadrille, rain recalling the language of music and the ‘lake moon moan’, and the colourful ending.
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Thank you for your feedback, Kim. I appreciate that we can give each other poetry reflections this way. I enjoy your blog.
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Exquisite. The brevity of the quadrille and magnetic influences created a masterpiece…..nah, it was you that did that! Love it.
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Mish, Thanks for the positive response. It matters.
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Reblogged this on The Reluctant Poet.
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Thank you
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Always a pleasure to read and share your posts with followers, My Dear!
xoxo
😘💕😁🌹
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So beautiful, Ali. “Lake moon moan” is spectacular, and those last lines are a stunner. I want to live that way, too.
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Thank you for reflecting back the words that spoke to you and for hosting on dVerse. I really enjoy the prompts and the community of writers.
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Ali, I just checked out the magnetic poetry site. What fun! I’ll have to give it a try very soon. Thank you! I like what you did with the words you had to work with.
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Carrie,
I really enjoyed the challenge of using the words given and moving them around. This final poem was a rewrite of the magnetic poem I wrote. I wanted to share a picture of it but I couldn’t figure out how. Definitely give it a try and let me know what you think.
Love to you my friend.
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Will do, Ali! Thank you. 💖
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“Rain recalls the magic of music” got me and carried me through. This is stunning Ali.
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I have a great love for rain and its magic. Maybe it’s because I grew up on the rainy Oregon coast.
Thanks for reflecting back Colleen. Make it a great day.
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